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From the lens A new version of "Cinderella" -- What if she had a GOOD stepmother?.

Much thanks to the Squidoo Angels who have blessed this story: AJ, WordCustard, Craftyville, MiMi, Lemonsqueezy, Bakerwoman, MissMerFaery, Kspoll, Graceonline, Frischy, Bonnie, Heather, Miaponzo, Brenda, GrammaLinda, Writingnag, Lou16, and KarenTBTEN!

  • GypsyLyric Apr 2, 2012 @ 3:15 pm | delete
    What a delightful story. This was just the break I needed this afternoon, thank you!!
  • Joie Feb 14, 2012 @ 1:23 pm | delete
    The story was delightful! I read it aloud to my husband, then watched him wipe away tears. For some reason, the Cinderella story always touches his heart. The accompanying music was perfect. Thank you.
  • Graceonline Feb 7, 2012 @ 9:19 pm | delete
    Congrats on your purple star! Well deserved.
  • _Joan_ Feb 7, 2012 @ 9:39 pm | delete
    Thank you much! Cindy is delighted to have some new bling to go with the fancy shoes!
  • YayasHome Jan 8, 2012 @ 4:46 pm | delete
    What a delightful story! I've always wondered why someone didn't write a story with a Good stepmother. You did very well. Thank you. You've renewed my faith in authors. Not to mention,.. I jus' KNEW there could be good stepmothers.
  • bloomingrose Jan 8, 2012 @ 8:02 am | delete
    I am so pleased to see that this lens seems to have developed a life of its own - it deserves it!
  • asvadwords Jan 8, 2012 @ 7:38 am | delete
    wow... awesome... nice history you changed to make it a book...
  • JZinoBodyArt Jan 6, 2012 @ 9:20 pm | delete
    I love it and all of the subtle changes, especially at the end! :D
  • cleanyoucar Jan 6, 2012 @ 9:16 pm | delete
    Nice twist, maybe you can start a new book on this =)
  • Jan 5, 2012 @ 10:55 pm | delete
    A new twist on an old tale... Nicely done.
  • fullofshoes Jan 5, 2012 @ 5:50 pm | delete
    I like your style :)
  • LAfamily Jan 5, 2012 @ 2:12 pm | delete
    I Like this story mom
  • bakingoutsidethebox Jan 5, 2012 @ 1:07 pm | delete
    Charming and well written. Best wishes for a happy future!
  • MMcGrath Jan 5, 2012 @ 10:27 am | delete
    Nice story
  • soyo Jan 5, 2012 @ 9:26 am | delete
    i love this story
  • Jan 5, 2012 @ 7:49 am | delete
    Great story - fun lens.
  • justforcats Jan 5, 2012 @ 3:15 am | delete
    I love this. Love the pink, love the story. What great before-bed reading...
  • Eddie20112011 Jan 5, 2012 @ 12:26 am | delete
    excellent!
  • toldyaso Jan 4, 2012 @ 4:23 pm | delete
    This is one of my favorite lens! I love pink, I love fairy tales, love, love LOVE!!! :)
  • Treasures-By-Brenda Jan 4, 2012 @ 2:47 pm | delete
    As others have said, great job, interesting story, well presented.
  • GrammaLinda Jan 4, 2012 @ 2:36 pm | delete
    Blessings! This is a wonderful story!
  • MindMart Jan 4, 2012 @ 2:49 am | delete
    Love the idea of fairy tales with alternative endings. Great job!
  • miaponzo Jan 4, 2012 @ 1:04 am | delete
    Yay!!!! happy ending :) Happy story! Blessed!
  • baby-strollers Jan 3, 2012 @ 10:55 pm | delete
    Those glass slippers are cool. Neat story, very creative.
  • missericaleigh Jan 3, 2012 @ 9:51 pm | delete
    I love fairtales. Theres good lessons to be learned in them. And your version is no exception
  • BunnyFabulous Jan 3, 2012 @ 1:47 pm | delete
    Great story! I liked it a lot, and I liked that you made the stepsisters good in this one too.
  • srioschavez Jan 2, 2012 @ 9:22 pm | delete
    great story
  • Rhidawn Jan 2, 2012 @ 2:57 pm | delete
    I was hesistant at first, but I'm glad I read it. It's amazing. I absolutly loved it! Great job and great lens! Keep writing!
  • juliavm Jan 2, 2012 @ 12:01 pm | delete
    Hope to read more stories from you soon.
  • Fashionchick Jan 2, 2012 @ 12:09 am | delete
    Very interesting
  • Frischy Jan 1, 2012 @ 10:17 pm | delete
    I enjoyed your version very much and look forward to reading more of your fiction.
  • Edutopia Jan 1, 2012 @ 8:44 pm | delete
    That is an interesting take on an old tale. What a unique lens.
  • jadehorseshoe Jan 1, 2012 @ 5:48 pm | delete
    Ultra-Fine Lens!
  • marsha32 Aug 25, 2011 @ 6:50 pm | delete
    I love your version :)
  • pheonix76 Jul 17, 2011 @ 6:50 pm | delete
    Wonderful version of Cinderella! :)
  • sousababy Jul 17, 2011 @ 1:47 pm | delete
    My father constantly would change the ending of fairy tales. I think it is fabulous!
  • Graceonline Jul 16, 2011 @ 5:49 am | delete
    P.S. This lens is so good, and such a unique use of Squidoo, that I just had to nominate it for Lens of the Day. I hope others finding this comment will take a moment to join me. The nomination form can be found on SquidooHQ, or search Squidoo for Megan Casey's "Secret Life of Lens of the Day."
  • Graceonline Jul 16, 2011 @ 5:32 am | delete
    If there had been an "I love it!", I'd have picked that in the poll. What a beautiful reshaping of an old fairy tale. Is it available in book form? I'd buy a copy for every one of my grandchildren and one for myself.

    As for that glass slipper, even as a child, I questioned its wearability. Always knew it would break. Nice to know that in the original tale, that slipper was pure gold. But then, gold is soft. Could it withstand a night of dancing?
  • bakerwoman Jul 13, 2011 @ 9:54 pm | delete
    I love this CInderella story so much and one of my favorite fairy tales.
    You are such a gifted writer and should publish children's story books or ebooks. This was such a fun read( I did this at work because it distracted me) and I hope you write more of the same.
  • RitaDern Jun 16, 2011 @ 10:47 am | delete
    Fun, Positive Stuff - thanks for sharing!
  • lemonsqueezy Jun 1, 2011 @ 12:32 pm | delete
    Wonderful!
  • lasertek May 13, 2011 @ 9:50 pm | delete
    I like the story very much.
  • Asinka Jan 24, 2011 @ 11:24 pm | delete
    Very interesting ...
  • LisaAuch Nov 28, 2010 @ 1:25 pm | delete
    Fabulous story!
  • JenOfChicago Nov 23, 2010 @ 12:28 pm | delete
    What a great job on this adaptation!
  • Margo_Arrowsmith Nov 14, 2010 @ 5:58 pm | delete
    I love changing stories like this, and you did an amazing job.

    Have you ever read Gregory Maguire? He wrote Wicked, the Wizard of Oz through the eyes of the Wicked Witch of the West, who wasn't so bad.

    Nice work.
  • spritequeen Nov 10, 2010 @ 8:28 pm | delete
    Great story! You're very talented! You should get it published in a book! (not just here)
  • Antonette13 Nov 2, 2010 @ 6:12 am | delete
    Great lens! Please check out my lens-- http://www.squidoo.com/fairytale-fever : it's also about fairy tales and stuff.
  • BonnieSue55 Oct 29, 2010 @ 5:16 pm | delete
    Joan,
    Have you considered publishing this as a kid's book? I think it would be great! If you would like to, you could even self-publish online, like at http://www.hulu.com or at http://www.wordclay.com. We need children to learn that being aware of other people around them, and the situations in which people live and work, can lead to having a caring heart and being able to have empathy for others. This story shows this and shares it as a natural order of things (for some personalities, which children can also learn from). I love it, and I really believe that this is a story that needs to be shared!
    God bless,
    Bonnie
  • hlkljgk Sep 9, 2010 @ 10:09 am | delete
    love it! have you ever noticed that ALL disney movies either kill, leave out or include an evil (step) mother?
  • _Joan_ Sep 9, 2010 @ 10:25 am | delete
    Wow! I didn't realize that. I'm not too familiar with the Disney princess genre. I wonder what they might think is the subconscious appeal of a motherless girl? I'm going to ponder that . . .
  • _Joan_ Sep 9, 2010 @ 10:51 am | delete
    One possibility, I think, is that they suppose that the target viewer of the movie (a young girl) envisions herself in the role of the main character. If she has no mother (or a bad mother), then she is the ranking female, facing the world on her own.
  • JoyfulPamela Jun 30, 2010 @ 1:16 pm | delete
    Oh Joan ~ this is a beautiful story!! I love it much more than the original story! I can't wait to read more of your stories. :-D
  • Lucy Jun 27, 2010 @ 10:25 pm | delete
    this gives me a rather more POSITIVE outlook to talk about in my speech
  • JoanneOtt May 27, 2010 @ 9:50 pm | delete
    Very well done. It's nice to have a tale that is positive and had a great role model of a stepmother.
  • vallain Apr 21, 2010 @ 8:17 am | delete
    Very well written and you fitted in elements from the original Cinderella, yet made your characters stand on their own. Lovely.
  • WordCustard Apr 21, 2010 @ 7:44 am | delete
    I didn't just like this, I LOVED it! Simply enchanting. The original fairy tales were very dark and some of that has been moderated over the years, but this tale is full of light and sparkle and happiness. Why should the step-mother not be kind, and the step-sisters not have good hearts? I loved the twist of the tale with the godmother too. I cannot help but leave a Fairy Godmother... er, no... *~*~ Angel Blessing ~*~* here for your rewrite of Cinderella.
  • KCottrell Dec 9, 2009 @ 9:08 pm | delete
    Oh beautiful . . . as a woman who lost her own mother at the age of 24, I cried when you wrote of Sarah offering up the emerald necklace. What a beautiful gesture from the stepmother to her stepdaughter, preserving the memory and honor of the mother. Aaah, kudos for holding us all to a standard of kindness, respect, and peace.
  • Carmel_Aaron Dec 2, 2009 @ 2:51 pm | delete
    Thank you. I loved it that all the main characters were good and kind.
    Even the stepmother.

    I also liked the part that Cinderella had a brain, a conscience
    and a desire to make a difference.

    You tell the story very well.

    Thank you,

    5 Stars
  • Susan52 Dec 1, 2009 @ 8:39 am | delete
    Excellent!
  • Laniann Dec 1, 2009 @ 4:36 am | delete
    I love your story.
  • aj2008 Dec 1, 2009 @ 2:49 am | delete
    What a lovely idea Joan and so well written and laid out! SquidAngel Blessings for you!
  • Ramkitten Nov 30, 2009 @ 3:35 pm | delete
    So much niceness! That was fun. And I'll be adding this to the Short Story Collection on Squidoo. Thank you for letting me know about this.
  • CleanerLife Oct 15, 2009 @ 6:30 pm | delete
    What a great way to retell a well known story! If only the people who try to make new movies out of old movies and TV shows had some of your talent! :)
  • Tiddledeewinks Aug 16, 2009 @ 11:37 pm | delete
    I know because I remarried that my grown daughter and ex have treated me with such hate, that the world could use a better story like this. Not all step-relationships are bad. My ex and daughter need to stop the jealousy.
  • rms Aug 16, 2009 @ 6:53 am | delete
    I love this!
  • GrowWear Aug 15, 2009 @ 2:11 pm | delete
    Best re-write of Cinderella I've read. :)
  • bloomingrose Jul 21, 2009 @ 4:15 am | delete
    I loved your lens! Thanks for putting all the effort into writing that story! I have become really interested in the power of story in healing, the wicked stepmother myth is one that could do with some positive changes. I'm sure you are putting a lot of good work into your blended family.

    Please see my book review of Confessions of an Ugly Stepsister by Gregory Maguire.

    http://www.squidoo.com/confessionsofanuglystepsister
    He focused most on the stepsisters, but portrayer the stepmother as a survivor.
    And that ezine article on glass slippers was hilarious.
  • BevsPaper Jul 15, 2009 @ 11:07 pm | delete
    Fantastic!
  • tdove Jul 8, 2009 @ 3:41 pm | delete
    Thanks for joining G Rated Lense Factory!
  • purplefire Jul 5, 2009 @ 10:35 pm | delete
    That was a really interesting take on Cinderella and idea of stepmothers. Great job.

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_Joan_

Joan lives in Los Angeles with her blended family.

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